아는여자
프랑스 혁명도 여성을 해방시키진 못했다. 식구들 끼니 걱정에 애가 탄 아줌마 군단이 “빵을 달라”며 베르사유로 진격해 혁혁한 공을 세웠어도 세상은 여전히 남자들 독무대였다. 참다 못한 푸줏간 집 딸 올랭프 드 구즈가 반기를 들고 나섰다. “여자들이여, 깨어나라. 언제까지 눈감고 있을 텐가.” 1791년 그녀는 여성에게 투표권 등 남성과 동등한 권리를 달라고 외치는 ‘여권선언’을 발표했다.내가 한 영작
As “Politics for people’s ⓐlife” has emerged as a new trend here, the influence of women in politics is growing gradually in Asia, too. The Democratic Party of Japan, which won ⓑlandslide victory recently, has elected 40 female representatives who have made pledges ⓒdirected related to the people’s lives, such as payment of child care allowances. As a result of the election victory, the proportion of ⓓfemale in the Japanese Diet has exceeded the 10 percent mark. The proportion of Korean women lawmakers in the National Assembly, which stands at 13.7 percent, is slightly higher than that of Japan.
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As “politics for people’s lives” has emerged as a new trend here, the influence of women in politics is growing gradually in Asia, too. The Democratic Party of Japan, which won a landslide victory recently, has elected 40 female representatives who have made pledges related directly to the people’s lives, such as payment of child care allowances. As a result of the election victory, the proportion of females in the Japanese Diet has exceeded the 10 percent mark. The proportion of Korean women lawmakers in the National Assembly, which stands at 13.7 percent, is slightly higher than that of Japan.
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ⓐ life → lives 복수명사 people에 호응하도록 life의 복수형태인 lives로 수정
ⓑ landslide victory → a landslide victory 승리 중에서도 구체적으로 한 차례의 승리이므로 a 추가
ⓒ directed related → related directly 공약(pledge)을 꾸며주는 분사는 related(관련된) 하나만 오면 충분하다. 중복된 분사 directed는 부사로 바꾸어서 자연스럽게 표현
ⓓ female → females 여러 사람을 나타내므로 복수형 females로 수정
‘생활정치’가 대세로 떠오르며 여성의 정치적 영향력은 점점 커지는 추세다. 최근 총선에서 승리한 일본 민주당만 해도 육아수당 지급 등 생활밀착형 공약을 내거는 동시에 여성 의원을 40명이나 탄생시켰다. 그 결과 일본 중의원의 여성 비율이 사상 최초로 10%를 넘어섰다는 소식이다. 우리 국회의 여성 비율은 13.7%로 일본보다 약간 높다.
내가 한 영작
The French Revolution did not give women political freedom. Olympe de Gouges, the daughter of a butcher from southern France, finally rose up against ⓐthe gender inequality. “Oh, women, women! When will you cease to be blind?” she asked. In 1791, she wrote ⓑ“Declaration of the Rights of Woman and Citizen” in which she demanded that French women be given the same ⓒright, including ⓓvoting right, as French men.
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The French Revolution did not give women political freedom. Olympe de Gouges, the daughter of a butcher from southern France, finally rose up against gender inequality. “Oh, women, women! When will you cease to be blind?” she asked. In 1791, she wrote the “Declaration of the Rights of Woman and the Female Citizen,” in which she demanded that French women be given the same rights, including the right to vote, as French men.
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ⓐ the gender inequality → gender inequality 정관사 the를 붙일만큼 성불평등이 특정하다고 볼 수 없으므로 the 삭제
ⓑ “Declaration of the Right of Woman and Citizens” → the “Declaration of the Rights of Woman and the Female Citizen,” 특정한 선언이므로 정관사 the 추가
ⓒ right → rights 권리가 투표권만을 뜻하는 게 아닌 그 외에 더 많은 권리들을 포함하므로 rights로 수정
ⓓ voting right → the right to vote 늘 하는 것이 아닌 이따금씩 하는 것이므로 to 사용
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