행복 점수
미국 포브스 선정 400대 부자와 그린란드 에스키모인, 아프리카 마사이족 사이엔 연결되는 끈이 있다. 바로 세계에서 행복도가 가장 높은 집단이라는 거다. 미국 일리노이대 설문조사 결과 부자들과 에스키모인의 평균 행복 점수가 80점으로 같았고, 마사이족이 78점으로 바로 뒤였다. 행복의 주관적이고 상대적인 속성을 보여주는 사례다. 비교의 함정에 빠지지 않고, 충분히 만족해하며 지금의 삶을 즐기는데 에스키모인·마사이족인들 행복하지 못할 이유가 없다.내가 한 영작
The Forbes 400, the wealthiest Americans selected by Forbes Magazine, have something in common with the Eskimos in Greenland and ⓐthe Maasai people in East Africa. ⓑThey are groups with highest happiness index in the world. According to a survey conducted by the University of Illinois in the United States, ⓒthe rich and the Eskimos ⓓshared the top with an average happiness index at 80 points. The Maasai people followed with 79 points. The study illustrates that happiness is a subjective and relative value. The Eskimos and the Maasai are not caught in the trap of comparing their lives with others, and as they are sufficiently content with their given conditions, there is no reason why they should not feel happy.
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The Forbes 400, the wealthiest Americans selected by Forbes magazine, have something in common with the Eskimos in Greenland and ⓐMaasai in East Africa. ⓑThey are the happiest people in the world. According to a survey conducted by the University of Illinois in the United States, ⓒthe Forbes 400 and Eskimos ⓓtopped the happiness index at 80 points. Maasai followed closely with 79 points. The study illustrates that happiness is a subjective value. Eskimos and Maasai do not compare their standing with their neighbors. There is no reason they should not be happy.
Writing Tip
ⓐ the Maasai people → Maasai
ⓑ They are groups with highest happiness index in the world. → They are the happiest people in the world 간단하고 명확한 표현으로 수정
ⓒ the rich → the Forbes 400 일반적인 부자가 아닌 포브스지가 선정한 400인에 해당하는 내용임
ⓓ shared the top with an average happiness index at 80 points → topped the happiness index at 80 points top을 동사로 사용할 수 있음
행복의 조건이 돈, 건강, 종교만은 아닐 터다. ‘행복 심리학’의 대가 에드 디너 일리노이대 교수는 ‘매우 행복한 사람’이란 논문에서 ‘관계’를 행복의 요체로 꼽았다. 222명을 대상으로 행복도를 측정해 상위 10%의 특성을 나머지 사람들과 비교한 결과다. 최고로 행복한 사람은 혼자 있는 시간이 적고, 사람들을 만나고 관계를 유지하는 데 많은 시간을 할애한다는 거다.
내가 한 영작
ⓐThe conditions for happiness mean more than money, health and religion. Professor Ed Diener of University of Illinois is known for ⓑhis psychology of happiness. In his paper ⓒtitled “Very Happy People,” he argued that ⓓrelationship was the key to happiness. He surveyed 222 people to measure their happiness, and the top 10 percent group was compared to the rest. The happiest people ⓔspend little time alone and invest ⓕgreat time meeting people and maintaining relationship with them.
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ⓐConditions that determine happiness include more than just money, health and religion. Professor Ed Diener of the University of Illinois is known for ⓑhis work in the psychology of happiness. In his paper ⓒ“Very Happy People,” he argued that ⓓhuman relationships were key to happiness. He surveyed 222 people and found that the happiest people ⓔspent little time alone and invested ⓕa great amount of time meeting people and maintaining relationships.
Writing Tip
ⓐ The conditions for happiness → Conditions that determine happiness 행복의 조건은 the를 쓸 만큼 명확하지 않음
ⓑ his psychology → his work in the psychology 그의 심리학이 따로 있는 것이 아니라 심리학에서 그가 한 일을 뜻함
ⓒ titled “Very Happy People,” → “Very Happy People,” 인용부호를 썼으므로 titled 불필요
ⓓ relationship was → human relationships 관계 중에서 구체적으로 인간 관계를 뜻함, 복수로 써야함
ⓔ spend….and invest → spent….and invested 절대적 진리라기 보다는 조사에 국한된다고 보아 과거시제 사용
ⓕ great time → a great amount of time 좋은 시간이 아니라 상당한 시간을 뜻함
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