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1776년, 재위 38년째를 맞은 조선 21대 왕 영조는 만 열 살인 세손(뒷날의 정조)의 혼사를 앞두고 무척이나 들떠 있었다. 조선조의 군왕이 살아서 세손빈을 두기란 쉬운 일이 아니었기 때문이다. 1467년 세조가 열 살 난 손자 자을산군(뒷날의 성종)의 아내로 한명회의 딸을 맞아들인 이후 300여 년간 어떤 임금도 손자며느리를 보지 못했다.내가 한 영작
In 1776, ⓐthe 21st king of Joseon Dynasty King Yeongjo, who entered the 38th year of reign, ⓑwas quite excited as the wedding of his 10-year-old grand son was approaching. During Joseon Dynasty, it was rare ⓒthat the king lived to a great age as to see the Grand Princess. Since King Sejo welcomed the daughter of Han Myeonghoi as the wife of Grand Prince Jaeulsan, who became King Songjong, there was no king who lived long enough to see the Grand Princess.
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In 1776, ⓐKing Yeongjo ⓑhad the honor of attending his 10-year-old grandson’s wedding. During the Joseon Dynasty, it was rare ⓒfor a king to live long enough to see his grandchildren marry. King Yeongjo, the 21st king of the Joseon Dynasty, was the first king since King Sejo in 1476 to have such an opportunity.
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ⓐ the 21st king of Joseon Dynasty King Yeongjo → King Yeongjo 21대 왕이라는 정보는 내용상 더 연관이 있는 뒤쪽으로 이동
ⓑ was quite excited as the wedding of his 10-year-old grand son was approaching → had the honor of attending his 10-year-old grandson’s wedding 왕의 신분을 고려한 더욱 공식적인 표현으로 수정
ⓒ that the king lived to a great age as to see the Grand Princess → for a king to live long enough to see his grandchildren marry to 부정사구로 간략히 표현
영국 내에서도 지나친 사치라는 비판이 있었다. 경제도 어려운데 국민의 세금을 낭비할 필요가 있느냐는 것이다. 일리가 있지만 이번 결혼식이야말로 ‘최고의 스타’ 윌리엄 왕세손을 앞세운 대대적인 홍보 이벤트란 점을 간과해선 안 된다. 세손빈의 드레스를 디자인한 영국 디자이너 세라 버턴에게 쏟아지는 관심을 비롯해 이번 결혼식의 경제 효과가 무려 17억 파운드(약 3조원)에 달한다는 분석도 있다.
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ⓐEven in the United Kingdom, there is criticism that it was a luxury. The critics say that the tax money should not be wasted ⓑwhen the economy is bad. ⓒThey have a point, but they should not overlook that the wedding was a grand publicity event for the Great Britain which promoted Grand Prince William to the stardom. According to an analysis, the economic effect of the wedding, including the attention on Sarah Burton who designed the wedding dress of the Grand Princess, amounts to 1.7 billion pounds.
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ⓐThe wedding is being criticized even in the United Kingdom for its decadence. Some say that tax money should not be wasted in such a manner ⓑwhen the economy is still suffering. ⓒWhile these critics have a point, the wedding will be an economic boon for the U.K. in the end. The event created great publicity for London during a period of financial hardship and will encourage tourism. The royal wedding also brought attention to Sarah Burton, who designed the bride’s dresses, and to merchants who make look-alike bridal accessories. According to one analysis, the economic effect of the wedding will amount to 1.7 billion pounds.
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ⓐ Even in the United Kingdom, there is criticism that it was a luxury → The wedding is being criticized even in the United Kingdom for its decadence. decadence가 좀 더 부정적 뉘앙스를 가지고 있음
ⓑ when the economy is bad → when the economy is still suffering 영어식 구체적 표현으로수정
ⓒ They have a point, but they should not overlook that the wedding was a grand publicity event for the Great Britain which promoted Grand Prince William to the stardom. According to an analysis, the economic effect of the wedding, including the attention on Sarah Burton who designed the wedding dress of the Grand Princess, amounts to 1.7 billion pounds. → While these critics have a point, the wedding will be an economic boon for the U.K. in the end. The event created great publicity for London during a period of financial hardship and will encourage tourism. The royal wedding also brought attention to Sarah Burton, who designed the bride’s dresses, and to merchants who make look-alike bridal accessories. According to one analysis, the economic effect of the wedding will amount to 1.7 billion pounds. overlook 다음에 that절을 쓰지 않음목적어가 필요함, economic boon이라는 용어 사용
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