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1519년 신대륙을 침공해 아스텍 제국을 정복한 스페인군의 숫자는 불과 600명. 정복자 코르테스의 용맹과 수완이 그만큼 탁월했던 것일까, 아니면 당시 신대륙에는 없던 말과 총포로 무장한 압도적 군사력에 힘입은 것일까. 이 수수께끼와 같은 정복 전쟁의 ‘보이지 않는 손’은 다름 아닌 마마, 즉 천연두의 유행이었다.내가 한 영작
The number of Spanish troops that conquered the Aztec Empire when they invaded the ⓐNew Continent in 1519 was only 600. Was it because the intrepid military skills of the conqueror Cortez ⓑwas superior to those of the conquered? Or was it ⓒowing to the overwhelming military might of the Spanish troops ⓓwhich was armed with rifles and other weapons that the Aztecs and other civilizations here did not posses? The truth is that the enigmatic “invisible hand” that helped the Spanish ⓔto win was nothing else but smallpox.
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The number of Spanish troops that conquered the Aztec Empire when they invaded the New World in 1519 was only 600. Was it because the intrepid military skills of the conqueror Cortez were superior to those of the conquered? Or was it due to the overwhelming military might of the Spanish troops who were armed with rifles and other weapons that the Aztecs and other civilizations here did not posses? The truth is that the enigmatic “invisible hand” that helped the Spanish win was nothing else but smallpox.
Writing Tip
ⓐ New Continent → New World 스페인군이 침략했을 때 신대륙이라는 것을 확실히 모르는 상태이므로 continent 보다는 world가 적절
ⓑ was → were ‘Cortez’가 아니라 ‘skills’가 주어이므로 복수동사 were로 수정
ⓒ owing to → due to 보어자리에는 due to를 씀
ⓓ which was → who were ‘troops’를 꾸며주기 위해서는 대명사 who가 적절하고 여기에 단수동사 was가 아닌 복수동사 were가 와야함
ⓔ to win → win 동사 ‘help’는 직접 도움을 줄 때에는 목적어 다음에 to 없이 바로 목적보어가 오기 때문에 to 삭제
면역력을 지닌 스페인 병사들은 아무런 피해가 없었던 반면, 원주민들은 신대륙에 처음 상륙한 괴질에 속수무책으로 쓰러졌다. 그러니 원주민들의 눈엔 스페인 병사들이야말로 ‘신의 자손’으로 보였고, 그들은 전래 종교를 버리고 기독교를 받아들였다. 천연두가 멕시코에서 남아메리카로 퍼짐에 따라 인구가 3분의 1로 줄어든 잉카 제국은 뒤이어 원정에 나선 피사로의 군대에 굴복하고 말았다.
내가 한 영작
The wild spread of smallpox among the Aztecs was the ⓐcause for the victory. While the Spanish soldiers were immune to the ⓑplague, the natives of the New World helplessly fell victim to the plague, which was newly introduced there. In the eyes of the ⓒaboriginals, the Spanish soldiers’ strength in the face of smallpox proved that they were none other than “the descendants of God.” They decided to convert to Christianity, deserting their traditional god. As small pox, which started in Mexico, spread to South America, the Inca Empire lost two thirds of ⓓpopulation due to the epidemic. Like the Aztecs, the Inca Empire was weakened by smallpox and was forced to surrender to Spanish conqueror Francisco Pizarro’s army in 1533.
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The wild spread of smallpox among the Aztecs was the source of the victory. While the Spanish soldiers were immune to the plague, the natives of the New World fell victim to the disease, which was newly introduced there. In the eyes of the Aztecs, the Spanish soldiers’ strength in the face of smallpox proved that they were none other than “the descendants of God.” They decided to convert to Christianity, deserting their traditional gods. As smallpox, which was first introduced in Mexico, spread to South America, the Inca Empire lost two-thirds of its population to the epidemic. Like the Aztecs, the Inca Empire was weakened by smallpox and was forced to surrender to Spanish conqueror Francisco Pizarro’s army in 1533.
Writing Tip
ⓐ cause for → source of 승리의 직접적인 원인이 아니라 승리의 계기를 뜻함
ⓑ plague → disease 반복을 피하기 위해서 plague를 disease로 대체
ⓒ aboriginals → Aztecs ‘aboriginal’은 대체로 호주 원주민을 뜻하므로 ‘Aztecs’로 수정
ⓓ population due to the epidemic → its population to the epidemic 관사류가 필요하므로 its 삽입. 그리고 ‘~로 누군가를 잃다’라는 표현은 ‘lose someone to ~’라고 하므로 ‘due’는 불필요
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